
[Ten moments of silence.] I I fell in love with the full, fluffy heaps of white on sidewalks, the icicles that clung to gutters and railings. II My mountains changed; They’re blue and ridged now. The summers bleed the pavement like steaming gray socks. Shade does not offer solace from moist, viscous air. In the afternoons, if luck chances by, the humidity lofts into thick purple clouds and rain slaps hot pavement. I can breathe. III The carrot leaves fell from gold foliage like drops of sunset. I closed my eyes and saw twelve wild turkeys gaggle cross the yard, a doe freeze, framed by the window, ineffable bright-lined spiders in the bathtub. IV Is it the hoar-frost winters that bring to mind poetry? There is no Parnassus in Virginia, only weed-filled fields and roads that twine like filaments through mountains. White-blossom dogwood and poison ivy have me of two minds; Could I have one without the other, please? V No, no thank-you. I'll come back some other time. VI Winter betrays me. It rains wet ice as if to ask "What did you expect?" I wanted frosting on the railings and jagged edges hung off trees. I wanted silence. VII The brown trees stir, naked, drab. Winter forgot to tuck in the covers before retiring. I would make some witty comment but VIII leave me alone. IX I do not look forward to summer. I tore a branch and picked the new leaves to pieces before letting it go. X Sunlight is too bright. They call it global warming, I call it perspective. |
Author's Comments
I did a bit of editing of this poem. Re-submitted it since I like my new version better. This will likely be the final.
Edits from the first version [Version1 found here How is the ending? Daily DeviationGiven 2006-10-2710 moments of silence by ~SpokenAubade is a self explanatory title, but that's to say nothing of the other senses. (Featured by `PoeticWar) |
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Breathe.
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To write the poem of the human conscience, if only of one man, even the most insignificant of man, would be to swallow up all epics in a superior and definitive epic.
Victor Hugo
"some witty comment but"
I probably won't.
I like this though.
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Doubts are like bothersome flies. They must all be crushed. That is rule number one.
-Samurai Champloo
What is the good of being a genius,
If you cannot use it as an excuse to be unemloyed?
-Gerald Barzan
The ending is wonderful, like it sums up the entire thing in one sentence.
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....and i cannot sleep without the radio on....
I wish for silence too.
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#flesh
Break the silence
Come crashing in
Into my little world
Painful to me
Enjoy the silence"
great work, I love it (=
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To write the poem of the human conscience, if only of one man, even the most insignificant of man, would be to swallow up all epics in a superior and definitive epic.
Victor Hugo
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Death grows...
beatiful
beatiful
beatiful!
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'Is that vodka?' Margarita asked weakly.
The cat jumped up on his chair in resentment.
`Good heavens, Queen,' he croaked, 'would I allow myself to pour vodka for a lady? It's pure alcohol!'
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"Thankee-sai, long days, kiss my ass and go to heaven."
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